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Crystalline snowflakes suspended in air.
The people on the street stop to stare.
As I look into your eyes,
The time usually flies
But now it stands still
And I pray that it forever will.

I found a way to make time stop
Silenced the world, you can hear a pin drop.
Just so I could hear the sound
Of your voice, the most wonderful sound I ever found.

I found a way to control time
And make sure, you’re forever mine.
I promise to always care for you
And do whatever you need me to.

I found a way to make time freeze
So here I am on my knees, begging please
Let me call you forever mine and I’ll be forever yours.
I’ll promise to love you forever more.

Baby, do me a favor and just say yes.
I promise you a everlasting happiness.
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Because when you find someone you think/ know you love, your time with them is never long enough.

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Lovely concept. Although once you get into a long realationship, you should always hold on to that individual in you. I like the very first stanza, although I suggest you get rid of the rhyming scheme, it seems that it doesn't add anything to an already lovely poem and you sacrafice too much to make it work. Try to rewrite in free verse, I think you will like the outcome. Of course, only a suggestion. Lovely as is.

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I wholeheartedly agree with your suggestion. *shakes head* I've been in this rut lately where the first two lines of a poem will pop into my head rhyming so I feel forced to make it work.

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